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題目:2013 DSE Q6 you are a human resources assistant. Your boss has observed that many people are leaving the office very late. He has asked you to write an article for the company newsletter describing the situation and discussing the negative effects. You have also been asked to give two suggestions to improve the situation. Provide a suitable title for your article.

Leaving lately among workers: what can be done



        It is really discouraging that manypeople are leaving the office very late. Some of them even go home atapproximately 1 am.  This is a serious threat to our company andyour life If you are lack of sleeping time, doesyou still have ability to face the challenge in work and life ?


        If we are to find out the solutions tothe problem, we should understand it’s causes first. To begin with, a lot ofpeople enjoy too much leisure time during working hour. For instance, it isdiscovered that high proportion of workers tends to visit the internetdiscussion forums like Uwants and HKGolden. Such behaviors will reduce yourworking efficiency so you need more time to finish your work.


Pursuing this further, many workers accumulate too much projectsbefore several days of deadline. It is commonplace that people like to shirktheir work to the later. However, finishing these works within a short time isan unachievable goals. Your price is that you need to work until night on thesedays.


The detrimental can be far-reaching. It is universally acknowledged that having insufficient sleeping timewill reduce your concentration on your work. Without enough concentration, yourworking efficiency will be reduced and the possibility to make mistakes will increase. As time goes by, your health and your generalperformance will be both worse and worse. You will feel tired frequently aslack of sleeping time will affect your mental health. In short conclusion, yourliving standard and your work are both at risk.


Given the hazardous effects of leaving lately, there is an urgentneed to work out the ways of dealing with it. The following are two possibleones.


Firstly, reducing leisure time is essential to those who leavinglately. Notwithstanding appropriate relaxing activities is reasonable, theproportion should be suitably controlled. If you use 15 minutes per hour to doyour own relaxing, your work life will be more balanced.


Secondly, With a view to accumulated work, workers are encouraged todistribute their workload to every
day evenly. It ismy suggestion that you design a working schedule before doingyour work. Clearly mark down the goals of each day can give you more motivationto finish the work. It is under these circumstances that you are not necessarilystay at company lately before the deadline.      



For fear that the problem gets worse and worse,all of us should spare no effort tomake improvement in order to alleviate the issue. Otherwise,we may pay a heavy price for it.


有咩不足之處敬請提出 想大概知個評分有幾多,有咩grade, 如果閣下有時間當然也希望具體講下可以點improve
btw thank you very much em46em46em46em46
   

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