原帖由 靈兒` 於 2016-3-13 12:31 PM 發表
Quite good! But I suggest that 'there is no doubt' rather than ''it is no doubt'
Your language is very fluent and accurate.
Points are convincing too.
I guess it is a lv 5 writing?
原帖由 notes6311 於 2016-3-13 01:35 PM 發表
i guess its lv4-lv5,nearly lv5
i think that the topic sentences hv to be more obvious for makers
also, i think that u can also write about what the parents can do in the conclusion with a few lines
原帖由 地球和月亮 於 2016-3-13 02:42 PM 發表
Much thanks for your comments! Would you mind telling me how should I improve if I am aiming for level 5*?
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