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英文作文~ 求各位師兄狠評及評分

If you had a choice,which one would you prefer,to study overseas or in Hong Kong?Give reasons to support your choice

If I had a choice,which one would I prefer, to study overseas or in Hong Kong,I would absolutely choose studying in Hong Kong. I have three reasons to support my views

First,the education system in Hong Kong is perfect. It is because students who studying in Hong Kong,have the opportunity to enjoy the use of 13 years free education. Students no need to pay the schooling in Hong Kong. Students not only can save more money but also to abate their burden. Compare with studying overseas,the money of using in studying,overseas is more expensive in Hong Kong.

Second,It is easier for me to study in Hong Kong because I can use my language to study. Now in Hong Kong, a lot of schools are using the Cantonese to study. So that I no need to learn the other language for study. And students will find it more clear to concentrate in class. But if studying overseas ,you must learn the other language,sometimes you don't know what the teachers are teaching. It is hard for students to study.

Third,studying in Hong Kong have a good study environment. Due to  
using the mother tone to study,students can make friends easily. So that if you have some problem of studying,you will find it easy to discuss with schoolmates. However studying overseas can't have this advantage. Moreover studying overseas may lead to discrimination. Thus studying in Hong Kong have a good study environment.

All in all,given above reasons, I think that studying in Hong Kong is better
than study overseas.
   

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我唔prefer 第一段 抄 題目 抄得咁勁 - -"


上網睇下 gerund 同 infinitive , 你好需要

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Students no need to pay the schooling in Hong Kong.

pay 係 verb

example:

Peter does not play football.
Peter and Mary do not go to school by bus.


Students DO NOT have to pay.........



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C: 1/6
your supporting details of 1st and 3rd body paragraph is irrelevant.
DON'T COPY THE QUESTION AS YOUR INTRO.
You put too much emphasis on studying in Hong Kong.

A: 2/6
Sentences begin with "so that" is not a complete sentence.
Identify the S-V-O. Do schools know how to study?
You have made a lot of mistakes in grammar.

E.g. It is because students who studying in Hong Kong,have the opportunity to enjoy the use of 13 years free education.
who studying? enjoy the use of ? 13 years free education?

Don't just combine the phrases and treat that as a complete sentence.

Title is missing.

O: 3/6
You should insert an counter argument.

G: 4/6
Don't use words like "don't" in formal essays/writings.

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