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Eng Composition 請狠評

Topic:
Yours school recently conducted a 'Working Week' scheme during which students could choose to work as one of the following:
a reporter
a teacher
a restaurant cook
a flight attendant
a photographer
You took part in the scheme. Now your carrers advisor has asked you to write an article for the school magazine describing your experience during the 'Working Week' and how you felt about the job you chose.
Write the article.

An Unforgettable Experience --- Being A Little Teacher


Last summer holiday, I participated in the ‘Working Week’ scheme conducted by our school. I have longed to be a teacher and this scheme helped me achieve my dream. Although there were many difficulties, it was still a really great and unforgettable experience for me.

I was assigned to hold a summer course to teach students English in a primary school. Before it began, I had prepared a lot to give lectures to them. Despite my sufficient preparation, it was a complete failure on the first day of the course. I was teaching some English vocabulary that day. When I was busy writing the words on the blackboard and explaining, I heard so much noise behind. I turned around only to find that they were not focusing on me. Some were chatting and some were even playing their mobile phones. I was furious but soon I realized that my lecture might be too boring for them since what they wanted after a whole-year studying was just some entertainment.

Then, I decided to alter my teaching method. In order to draw their attention, I bought a box of scrabble and designed some flash animations to illustrate the meaning of vocabulary to them. It was quite successful and they seemed to enjoy the games and animations very much. At the following days, I designed various games and competitions and they paid much more attention in my lessons. We got along very well and became good friends even until now.

Although I didn’t know whether they have learnt anything from my lessons, I am sure we all enjoyed the moments very much. I am very glad that I have made many new friends. Also, this experience was very beneficial to me. Not only did it improve my English, but also my communication skills. I also realized that being a teacher needs much more efforts than I have ever imagined. Much time is required to prepare different teaching materials, plan the lessons, and most importantly, think of ways to make students learn effectively. I will respect my teachers more after this tough but worthwhile experience.

Finally, I believe participating in the ‘Working Week’ scheme would be a marvelous and beneficial experience for all of you. I hope you will join it next time and share your wonderful moments with our schoolmates.


[ 本帖最後由 tmchan1379 於 2010-4-5 10:50 AM 編輯 ]
   

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- good: students not concentrating----> pay attention, get along

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A6/6
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JUST A GUESS ON YOUR MARKS

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原帖由 G_G!smileXP 於 2010-4-5 10:29 AM 發表
- good: students not concentrating----> pay attention, get along

C5/6
A6/6
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JUST A GUESS ON YOUR MARKS
thanks for your comments

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A Quick look ONLY.

C: 6/6
Very Good.

A: 4/6
Check how to punctuate a sentence.

O: 6/6
Very Good

G: 5/6
Remember, that is a formal essay.

21/24 (5+)
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原帖由 7s711 於 2010-4-6 03:02 PM 發表
A Quick look ONLY.

C: 6/6
Very Good.

A: 4/6
Check how to punctuate a sentence.

O: 6/6
Very Good

G: 5/6
Remember, that is a formal essay.

21/24 (5+)
唔該曬先
仲有我想問一問fused既意思係咪即係唔好成日用and join埋兩個sentence
應該full stop左佢再寫?

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回覆 #6 tmchan1379 的帖子

可以,不過你漏左標點
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原帖由 7s711 於 2010-4-6 10:04 PM 發表
可以,不過你漏左標點
即係要加番comma 係 and/but前面?

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回覆 #8 tmchan1379 的帖子

for, and, but, or, yet, nor, so 都要

[ 本帖最後由 7s711 於 2010-4-6 06:49 AM 編輯 ]
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