本區搜索:
Yahoo!字典
打印

[Eng] 07 ce task01

[隱藏]

07 ce task01

ce 2007 task 01






A surprising love story


Mid-semester,all of students was becoming friendly. Amy was a pretty girl among the classmates. Plenty of other class students wanted to meet Amy, but she always refused their invitations, as if she was waiting for someone...


One day, David mustered up his courage to date Amy to go to the cinema. Stupendously, He was answered"Yes" by Amy that many of the students felt incredible and also appeared envy.



On Saturday after school, Amy used rapid footfall to change her uniform and went to fashionable boutique buying suitable clothes. Meanwhile, Amy snipped a spiky hair in the hair salon.Besides, she turned home back to say goodbye with mom and took some money that got out.



8:30p.m., a clocklike David was waiting with Amy that she was late adorable. David was being fascinated by Amy beautiful dress and novel hair when he saw her. They missed the movie on 8:45, but they were able to chat delightfully with a silver night.David expressed his embarrassed love and said many soft words to Amy. Amy’s eyes were falling down tears totally while Amy had been waited for “someone”.
Lastly, they became a pair of the sweetness couple.






幫下手比下意見 em46

ps:我英文唔知點 em01




[ 本帖最後由 waipa 於 2011-4-8 05:31 PM 編輯 ]
附件: 您所在的用戶組無法下載或查看附件
   

TOP

TOP

4
4
4
3
--------------
15/24

is is a fair piece!!

TOP

引用:
原帖由 victor808 於 2011-4-8 05:39 PM 發表
4
4
4
3
--------------
15/24

is is a fair piece!!
how can i improve to "good"

TOP

TOP

我都會俾樓上既分數
4443=15
好處就係有d準確既vocab
但唔好處太多
第一,好多不知所謂既句子。唔識都要亂寫一通,懶花巧,但又力有不逮,搞到冇人明。
第二,文法太致錯誤,人地叫你寫about 100 words,你走去寫19x,寫岩文法都唔會有事,但係你寫錯。
第三,故事既要求係結局有張力,顯示角色在故事中的改變(經一事,長一智),但可大路。你標題都寫A surprising love story,但文中無呼應主題,唔surprising。其中一個做法係個女仔發覺外表唔係最重要,咁已經爆grade 了。但你平鋪直敍,考試要大路得黎又好似好有新意,但你做唔到。

TOP

C:5/7
L:5/7
O:5/7
T:15/21

NICE VOCAB!

TOP

重要聲明:小卒資訊論壇 是一個公開的學術交流及分享平台。 論壇內所有檔案及內容 都只可作學術交流之用,絕不能用商業用途。 所有會員均須對自己所發表的言論而引起的法律責任負責(包括上傳檔案或連結), 本壇並不擔保該等資料之準確性及可靠性,且概不會就因有關資料之任何不確或遺漏而引致之任何損失或 損害承擔任何責任(不論是否與侵權行為、訂立契約或其他方面有關 ) 。