Hong Kong’s population generate (generates) 600 million tons of solid waste every year and our three landfills are rapidly approaching full capacity. To help solve this problem, the government has been conducting studies into different ways to reduce waste. As the chairperson of the Environment Protection Club at your school, write a letter to the editor of the Young Post to persuade students to do more to reduce waste. Suggest ways in which they can help reduce waste at school and at home. Sign your letter ‘Chris Wong’
Dear Editor,
I am writing to response
(respond to) the problem of the three landfills reaching its capacity soon. 600 million tons of solid waste is generated every year and most of them are threw to landfills. Once three landfills reach its capacity and there is not another way to deal with the giant amount of solid waste. It is certain that chaos will follow and social stability will be disturbed. Thus, we must
(inappropriate tone) [it is suggested that] do thing before it becomes too late.
As for
(Xfor) a student, there are both short and long-term measure
(measures) available to remedy the production of solid waste.
The short-term measure consist of the usage of 3R, reduce
、(,)reuse
、(,)recycle. At school, we should deplete two sides of the paper before we throw it into rubbish bin. But don’t
(inappropriate tone: in your letter to the Editor, you should not use contractions) underestimate paper, if everybody throw
(throws) a paper and it will ultimately add up. Moreover, we should have a own water bottle instead of buying a disposable water bottle as the former can be reused. However, if students insist of
(on) buying a disposable water bottle
(disposable water bottles), it is suggested to buy an environmental-friendly water bottle.
(The meaning of this sentence is not clear.) Furthermore, there are free newspaper
(newspapers) available for each class in some schools and most of them ends up to be threw away. We should gather these useless
(Avoid being subjective) newspaper to recycle station instead of throwing it away. Recycling is far
(much) more meaningful than just throwing it away.
Apart from doing these things at school, there are another
(other) approaches to be done
(do) at home. It sounds stereotypical to say that we should reuse plastic bag
(bags) or use
(bring) our own bag instead of getting a plastic bag when we are shopping, but it does work. Also, it is paramount to set up three bins to classify different types of waste in a bid to be more convenient to recycle them and remind us to cherish the things we have so as to diminish the amount of waste we generate at home.
(Note that the target audience is students. Can students set up three bins? Try to improve your expression.)
Whatever any short-term ways be done to produce less amount of waste, it is of utmost importance to cultivate the sense of environment protection in
^the long run as it is not only conducive to overcome the plight of the restricted landfill capacity, but also for the whole environment protection.
(X protection)
After all, it is everyone’s business to protect the environment and the problem of landfills reaching its capacity deserve
(deserves) our all attention
(full attention) as no one is immune to its consequence.
(consequences)
Thanks for your kind attention.
(The ending is too short; inappropiate tone)
Regards,
(Yours faithfully,)
Chris Wong
(What’s your post)
- For language used, there are some grammatical mistakes in this writing. You are also reminded that the target audience is students. Try to show your understanding towards the characteristics of these students.
- There is a lack of features of the letter to the Editor. You may consider the use of rhetorical questions and question tags as well. The vocabulary range is wide but you need to use these words more accurately and carefully.
- Besides using words like “should”, you can use more phrases like “it is suggested that”, “it is recommended that”, “Why not…”, “You have to bear a point in mind.”, etc.
- For content, you may consider 5Rs like replace, reject, recycle, reuse and reduce. This can enrich your content of the letter to the Editor.
More vocabulary used in this question: - Foster behavioural changes.
- Lifestyles (wasteful or economical)
So your mark
C 4/7 L 3/7 O 3/7
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