耽逸

Retaker 原本aim4 考完希望保得住個3...我都知唔應該再諗 但個心唔放返低真係靜唔到落黎溫listening 大約講下寫左咩希望大家比D意見

Part A: 大約係 以SU主席身分寫speech 講importance of following school rules+interpersonal relationships點何幫new students achieve success and enjoyment of school life
- 寫左話守校規可以引導學生有良好的行為品行 有助日後出到社會achieve success
- 寫左話發展relationships會對日後有幫助 而且朋友可以令學校生活更愉快

Part B: 揀左第五題 講disappearing of HK's street culture 話要focus on one HK culture/street culture+why it is worth preserving 係寫essay
* 無理到format...
- Intro: HK近年拆唔小herritages 提左幾個eg -> 話HK culture dissapearing同worth preserving
- 提左D文化背景+講左點解會拆culture buildings個類野
* 開始唔夠時間下面寫得少
-寫左話好多culture野都係集體回憶
- 寫左話其實preserving culture 其實可以吸引遊客 推動經濟
* 兩句conclusion+有比eg
其實我唔太明佢essay條題目係street culture 但又話可以focus on HK culture係點 最後寫左偏向herritages好驚離題 而且唔夠時間得三分一多D係講why睇現代D解讀好似離晒題...
同埋part B比較多grammar mistake/錯字em01

3+~4-底 平時language同orgranization都係不高不低個種
大家覺得保3穩嗎em01 溫完list再返黎睇T_T

[ 本帖最後由 耽逸 於 2016-4-8 07:57 PM 編輯 ]

耽逸

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原帖由 lee12345 於 2016-4-8 07:58 PM 發表
SAME HERE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! T_T

>>>其實我唔太明佢essay條題目係street culture 但又話可以focus on HK culture係點 最後寫左偏向herritages好驚離題  

我見到佢話HK culture or street culture先揀/_\
點知寫左HK culture之後又好似話要寫街頭文化淆晒底早知唔揀

耽逸

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原帖由 0310672 於 2016-4-9 11:53 AM 發表
disappearing of HK's street culture
我相信只是題目的BACKGROUND
focus on one HK culture/street culture+why it is worth preserving
才是題目要你寫的地方吧

但係HK culture同street culture好似好大分別
唔肯定依個位 如果佢要求street culture only既話寫HK culture應該離題
同埋雖然後面話focus on one HK culture/street culture 但佢前面又話"disappearing HK's street culture" 好混亂

BTW假如真係淨係理focus on one HK culture/street culture+why it is worth preserving依樣野既話
咁我寫HK herritage算唔算離題? 十萬個THXem46