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法律大學生幫你<免費>改英文作文

我是一名在海外讀法律的大學生(全球頭十五名大學),將來打算在外國學術界工作,英文有相當水平。
我數年前曾靠小卒準備公開試,現在想用空閒時間幫助下一輩,所以現在幫大家<免費>改正文章。我會用Microsoft Word將你的文章更正,如可以給予詳盡解釋。每一位小卒HKDSE會員限提交一篇文章。(請不要開啟新賬戶來提交新文章)
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2.Because of the lack of sportsfacilities,some people in your community have suggested that schools shouldallow the public to use their sports facilities after school hours.


  Writea letter to the editor of the hong kong daily stating your opinion. Supportingyour opinion with three reasons.






  DearEditor,


  Due to the insufficient provision of sports facilities,the public have suggested that schools should leave their sports facilities for public after school hours. I absolutely understand the good intention of the above opinion,but I am afraid that would cause negative impacts on our community. In the light of this , I am writing to express my concern over the effects this may have on us.


  Of all the reasons why schools should not allow the public to use their sports facilities after school hours , non are significant as the fact that it is dangerous. Due to the fact that using sports equipment is difficult, we have to pay attention to the safety rules before we start to play a sport. Otherwise,it is not safe. If people are allowed to use schoolds' sports equipment after school, they would not receive any teaching by PE teachers.As a result, people may use the sport facilities wrongly as they do not have clear guildlines to follow with.In this case, people may get hurt easily. Let's take table tennisas an example,do you know how to hold a ping pong pat correctly? We should holdit with our forefinger straight. If this is not taught when people try to playtable tennis, the pat will fall out easily. Can you imagine how danger it is?Therefore isn't it not safe for school to keep their sports equipment open tothe public after school hours?


  Apart from the safety reasons, we should also note that sports facilities are owned by school. We should consider that schools' purchasing of sports equipment is mainly  for teaching, bit not for the public use.If some people use it without care and damage it, students would have fewer sports facilities to use. As for teachers, their teaching qualitywould then be lowered owing to the damaged tools. It will be hard for teachers to demonstrate how to play badminton if the balls are broken. With this  in mind, students would not be able to acquire the techniques effectively when good-condition sports equipment is not provided.Therefore, students effectiveness of learning would be impeded.


Besides the purpose of using , what comes next should be that it might cause a conflict between the public and the schools about the time of using it.In a sense that schools often have school team trainings after school , people would have no access to the sports tools while the school team is using. This would lead to arguments about the time of using it. People would request for a onger use of time while the schools need the place for practicing. Then ,the time that the public can really enjoy the facilities is very limited.





  The suggestion brings us adversely effects- puting us in danger if we use it without teaching , wrong purpose of using and leading to conflicts. It is hoped that we can take the above reasons into account when we are thinking about whether this suggest should be accepted.

[ 本帖最後由 dse55555 於 2017-2-13 07:31 PM 編輯 ]

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