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Task2 Q.2

Your school building is going to be pulled down as part of the redevelopment of the area. Wirte an article for your school magazine saying why you think this is or is not a good idea.



Protect Our School !


Imagine learning in a place without classroom, having lunch without a canteen, and playing ball games without a playground. No wonder these are the severe consequences that will be brought about to a student without a school campus. Being confronted with this upcoming toil, we should unite to protect our school being pulled down for the redevelopment of the area!

Pulling down our school building is no different from pulling down our memories. Since our school has undergone 110 years of history, despite periodic renovation, there was no record that our school building was compelled to move. Once we are obliged to move, all the rooms and playgrounds, which are full of our memories, will be inflicted to exist. Our hard works that we have dedicated to our school for years will all be shattered. Is it a must that pulling down our school is the only solution? I am reluctant to perceive how our school will be.

Without any prospects, neither do we know how our new school will be, nor do we know when our new school is to be built. What we know is we are going to pursue our learning at a so-called – “school”. A “school” without basketball courts and football fields, without tuck shops and canteens, and worst of all, there are no libraries and computer rooms! How unbelievable that we are studying at such kind of “school”!

Although it is an undeniable fact that we have to move, moving away from our most lovable school, we still have to pay our utmost effort in protecting our school, or in the worst case, the school will live in our memories forever. We sincerely seek reconciliation with the government. I believe every student will unanimously think that – “Don’t pull down our school!”

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[ 本帖最後由 macverson 於 2009-5-7 07:59 PM 編輯 ]
   

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我d英文都好馬虎!!
我認為一句sentence 有4個perp好怪that,bring,about,without
No wonder these are the severe consequences that will bring about to a student without a school campus.

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lv4. attempts at using various structures are seen, though some are wrong.
on the whole, it's understandable and organized.

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引用:
原帖由 kissdom1 於 2009-5-7 07:14 PM 發表
我d英文都好馬虎!!
我認為一句sentence 有4個perp好怪that,bring,about,without
No wonder these are the severe consequences that will bring about to a student without a school campus.
that and bring are not prepositions, though the sentence is grammatically wrong.

[ 本帖最後由 docare 於 2009-5-7 07:23 PM 編輯 ]

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原帖由 docare 於 2009-5-7 07:21 PM 發表

that and bring are not prepositions, though the sentence is grammatically wrong.
Do u mind telling me what are the gramatical mistakes in this sentence??

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個style 不太習慣
而且在school magnzine上可唔可以曬咁多complex sentense 都成疑

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consequences cannot "bring about to" students.

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文句累贅...
比人覺得你強行將一D深字+入篇文入面...
Simple is perfect
[url=http://littlesoldier.net][/url

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冇錯Dd用字真係深...
不過個style扣哂分 因為你係寫落school magazine
用字太深師弟妹要查dictionary

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回覆 #6 s041 的帖子

其實係冇問題的
同埋樓上你個理由係唔成立的
POST 文者請注意: POST 之前請PROOFREAD 清楚

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